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   It was a normal day for me or at least as normal as it could get. I was walking home on my normal route which lead me through the crime central the place was a dump. Old buildings on my right, broken into ones on my left. All had one thing in common busted walls, windows, and doors from all the gang activity. My name is Peter, I am a 19 year old writer. I write about birds and stories involving them. I have brown curly hair that gets out of control very easily, I also have a black goatee.

   "Hey! Kid! Give us your money!" a thug said as I walked by an alley.

   "Look I don't want any trouble so do yourself a favor and leave me be." I replied not even looking at them.

   "That's not how it works kid. You give us your money and we let you go. Other wise your going to get hurt." the big muscle head said wearing a yellow sleeveless shirt with ripped blue jeans to make them shorts. He had five scrawny guys all with baseball bats behind him. I rolled my eyes as they were making a big mistake I may have been about their size but less muscles but I knew a way around that.

   "Get him!" they all said as they all ran at me. I jumped and back flipped over them they all slammed into each other knocking each other out.

   "Idiots." I said out loud as I fixed my backpack and walked on home. It was about an hour walk home and it was now dark. When I came onto my door step I saw a package from someone. "Huh? Whats this?" I wondered I saw a total of six holes in it obviously to keep something alive. There was a note on the top I didn't see until I packed it in my house.

   It read:


        "Warning: Don't open until you know your favorite type of BIRD. Once you know it to be true open with care for there is no turning back once the seal is broken.


        -Freedom."


   "Who the heck is freedom?" I said out loud wondering how they knew I liked birds. I had drawings I did when I was outside watching birds fly over my head all over my place especially on my computer desk. I went over and started up my blog and found a random question from someone named, "anonymous," his question was, "If you could be an animal what would it be and why?" One person said a dragon for the ability to rip apart his enemies, disturbing, another said a fox for its fur, unusual, last one and most recent said, "none I already am one," as I read that I thought he was a weirdo. I started typing my response to the question.

   "I would be an Eagle. For the ability of flight and the flying free and away from this dreadful city." was what I typed and posted on it. Just out of curiosity I looked back at the package I laid on my couch. I went and grabbed the box and placed it on my lap as I pulled out my Bald Eagle themed pocket knife and tore the tape on the top down the middle. When I opened the box I saw a bright light shine from it as I opened it. When I fully opened it there was nothing in it but a feather, a silver one at that. I picked it up and held it at arms length and walked outside with it. When it hit the sunlight it changed from a silver color to gold and I thought about the Bald Eagles having these size of feathers. Just then I felt a twinge of pain in my finger tips as I noticed the feathers end was sinking into my skin.

   When the feather disappeared into my skin I felt a burning sensation like none before. And it was all over as if my body was inside of a pizza oven. I fell to my knees in pain and felt my shirt growing tighter especially in the sleeves. I quickly took off my white t-shirt and saw what was happening to my arms they were growing feathers those of a Bald Eagle. My fingers were covered in the feathers but still able to move like normal I felt my legs extending and getting narrower as I heard my shoes rip to reveal my new three-toed talons I tried moving them to my shock they responded by enclosing like that of a claw.

   From my neck down was now an Eagle but that was just the start I felt my mouth extend just to see me growing a beak where my mouth and nose were. My eye sight enhanced to the point I could see a beetle moving in the grass of my neighbors yard which was about a yard away. I went to look in the mirror in my bathroom to see a human sized Bald Eagle starring back at me.

   I ran out my back door back the way I came and tried to take flight and it was surprisingly easy. That was until I lost my concentration and nearly slammed into an Ad for toothpaste. I started flying straight wondering where to go next I was free, free to do whatever I wanted, and I had the abilities of that of an Eagle. As I flew I noticed a shadow coming up on me fast as I flew. Until I saw a hawk flying right beside me same size too.

   "Who the heck are you?" I asked as the hawk started to fly upside down showing off.

   "Name's Andy. I see you got my gift." he replied.

   "What? You sent that?" I said in shock.

   "Yeah. Follow me I will explain on the way." he told me as he changed direction to go east.

   I am now in a secret location with ten other people who got turned into birds and from what I can see we are the smallest group out of all the people who got transformed. But I am happy just wish there were more girl birds so far its all guys its weird.



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Another original TF from me and i got to say its tricky to come up with bird TFs all i need to say i proud on how well it turned out
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Mood: Neutral ~NanoCarp0 Jan 12, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Honestly, I can say that this one was pretty good. The TF itself was well executed, but the circumstances around it are in need of more than a little bit of work. Especially the random backflip.
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~sonicexcel Jan 12, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
ok now about the backflip think about it slums five on one and your dead center what else can you do the guy jumps and makes them slam into each other
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~NanoCarp0 Jan 12, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I'm not saying that it's a bad idea, or not a good choice of action, but that if a person can backflip clear over a bigger guys head (You did say he was surrounded, no?) then that's not normal.
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